I have two comments on the above picture, which is an ad from the great series Gefen ran this year. I wonder what fellow DDFers think.
1. In the poem, shouldn't it have been, for poetic and rhyming reasons, "Adults, teens or tykes"? (with or without the Oxford comma)
2. More importantly, I think that the final quote should be "Ask not where you can take it, but where it can take you", especially since it's based on JFK's famous line.
I actually sent these comments to the marketing company, but annoyingly enough, they didn't change it (for the calendar which they later produced), especially the second one.
What do you think, do I have a point (or two)?
Point #1:
No and yes. "A dults or teens or tykes" and "Cam ping and moun tain hikes" both have six syllables. I agree with you, however, that it doesn't flow. Rather " A
'dults,
'teens or
'tykes" and "
'Cam ping and
'moun tain
'bikes" both have three accented syllables. Flows better IMHO (and more grammatically correct).
Point #2:
Starting a sentence with "Ask..." means a question word is to follow ("where/can"), although they are missing the ',' before the ensuing question ("Ask not
, 'where..."). If they are already going to use poetic license, however, then I agree, both phrases should be the same ("you/it can").