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Re: Proofread DDMS Posts In Advance...
« Reply #1041 on: May 26, 2022, 09:15:33 PM »
What happened tho this deal? Amazon sent cease and desist?
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Re: Proofread DDMS Posts In Advance...
« Reply #1042 on: May 26, 2022, 09:24:38 PM »
What happened tho this deal? Amazon sent cease and desist?
It died and better odds of being honored if deleted.
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Re: Proofread DDMS Posts In Advance...
« Reply #1043 on: May 27, 2022, 01:26:42 PM »
That's what I thought, so how does taking it down after it's dead help for..
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Re: Proofread DDMS Posts In Advance...
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Re: Proofread DDMS Posts In Advance...
« Reply #1046 on: August 08, 2022, 12:54:16 PM »
It's pretty dense...
https://www.dansdeals.com/more/dans-commentary/dots-proposed-refund-changes-decent-start-many-loopholes-misses-bigger-picture/
The title is a bit hard to read to start, maybe something along the lines of "The DOT's Proposed Refund Policy is a Good Start, But Misses the Bigger Picture"
And leave the loopholes part for the article?

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Re: Proofread DDMS Posts In Advance...
« Reply #1047 on: August 08, 2022, 12:57:36 PM »
United had done as that is an unfair and deceptive practice

Change "as" to "since"

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Re: Proofread DDMS Posts In Advance...
« Reply #1048 on: August 08, 2022, 01:03:37 PM »
I think it will help to split it up with headers, like "Background" after the first paragraph.
Then "proposed policy before the paragraph"after all that"

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Re: Proofread DDMS Posts In Advance...
« Reply #1049 on: August 08, 2022, 01:05:34 PM »
international flights should the consumer not accept
I think using the words "if the consumer does not" instead of "should" would be easier to read

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Re: Proofread DDMS Posts In Advance...
« Reply #1050 on: August 08, 2022, 01:08:55 PM »
cancelled flights be defined
Maybe "should be"?

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Re: Proofread DDMS Posts In Advance...
« Reply #1051 on: August 08, 2022, 01:10:32 PM »
that significant changes eligible
"changes that are eligible"?

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Re: Proofread DDMS Posts In Advance...
« Reply #1052 on: August 08, 2022, 01:10:58 PM »
Is there a difference between schedule changes in advance, and delays on the day of travel?
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Re: Proofread DDMS Posts In Advance...
« Reply #1053 on: August 08, 2022, 01:16:24 PM »
The DOT is proposing that airlines and travel agents that received significant government financial assistance after this rule goes into effect (pity this wasn’t done before the COVID bailouts!) to issue cash refunds to:

"that receive"
"must issue"

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Re: Proofread DDMS Posts In Advance...
« Reply #1054 on: August 08, 2022, 01:18:27 PM »
Requiring airlines to offer a non-expiring voucher when someone has a serious communicable disease is a good thing, but then giving the airlines an out by allowing to charge whatever they want to process that voucher may defeat the purpose of the regulation, which is to stop people from flying when they are ill by offering them the ability to not incur a financial loss.

I think this sentence is a bit long :).
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Re: Proofread DDMS Posts In Advance...
« Reply #1055 on: August 08, 2022, 01:33:31 PM »
Can't point out exactly whats wrong here (many good suggestions above). However I felt that this it too much information in one.
In other words the way the evaluation of the DOT rule is I got confused.
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Re: Proofread DDMS Posts In Advance...
« Reply #1056 on: August 08, 2022, 02:18:18 PM »
It's pretty dense...
https://www.dansdeals.com/more/dans-commentary/dots-proposed-refund-changes-decent-start-many-loopholes-misses-bigger-picture/
Not dense, but confusing.

For starters, the start is unclear.  You're commenting on something the DOT has done, but instead of telling us just what that is, you link to a 115 page document. 

Then comes the background, but it's hard to hold the reader's interest in this when they still don't know what it's the background for.

"...if they changed your flight more than 2 hours"  Does this mean:

a. if your flight time was 2 hours longer than scheduled
b. if they changed your scheduled flight more than 2 hours before departure
c. if your departure time was more than 2 hours later than originally scheduled

I think it's c, but not really sure.

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Re: Proofread DDMS Posts In Advance...
« Reply #1057 on: August 08, 2022, 02:27:38 PM »
Not dense, but confusing.

For starters, the start is unclear.  You're commenting on something the DOT has done, but instead of telling us just what that is, you link to a 115 page document. 

Then comes the background, but it's hard to hold the reader's interest in this when they still don't know what it's the background for.

"...if they changed your flight more than 2 hours"  Does this mean:

a. if your flight time was 2 hours longer than scheduled
b. if they changed your scheduled flight more than 2 hours before departure
c. if your departure time was more than 2 hours later than originally scheduled

I think it's c, but not really sure.

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Re: Proofread DDMS Posts In Advance...
« Reply #1058 on: August 08, 2022, 02:28:15 PM »
Thanks @lcm, adopted those!
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Re: Proofread DDMS Posts In Advance...
« Reply #1059 on: August 08, 2022, 02:43:19 PM »
Anything else?
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