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Nightmare On Iberia Airlines: Kids Forced Off Plane In Spain
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The Kids In Spain Are Left Off The Plane: A Nightmare With Iberia Airlines
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Author Topic: Has This Ever Happened To You With IBeria Airlines-Minors Bumped?  (Read 87670 times)

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Re: Has This Ever Happened To You With IBeria Airlines-Minors Bumped?
« Reply #280 on: September 06, 2017, 12:00:37 AM »
Like one of these better?

Nightmare On Iberia: The Kids In Spain Are Forced Off The Plane

The Kids In Spain Are Forced Off The Plane: A Nightmare With Iberia

The Kids In Spain Are Forced Off The Plane: A Nightmare On Iberia
Maybe leave out "the"  ?

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Re: Has This Ever Happened To You With IBeria Airlines-Minors Bumped?
« Reply #281 on: September 06, 2017, 12:02:07 AM »
I would put the one sentence version in the first sentence.
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DD haa confirmed that Iberia bumped three minor children travelling alone on the second leg of their journey and left them stranded in a foreign country with only a hotel voucher

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Re: Has This Ever Happened To You With IBeria Airlines-Minors Bumped?
« Reply #282 on: September 06, 2017, 12:06:26 AM »
Like one of these better?

Nightmare On Iberia: The Kids In Spain Are Forced Off The Plane

The Kids In Spain Are Forced Off The Plane: A Nightmare With Iberia

The Kids In Spain Are Forced Off The Plane: A Nightmare On Iberia

#2.

#1 doesn't flow properly, and #3 is less accurate.
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Re: Has This Ever Happened To You With IBeria Airlines-Minors Bumped?
« Reply #283 on: September 06, 2017, 12:09:49 AM »
Updated: https://www.dansdeals.com/points-travel/airlines/airline-news/iberia-forces-3-kids-flying-alone-miami-tel-aviv-off-plane-spain/
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It seemed like the family is owed 9,000 Israeli Shekels under Israeli law, why are they receiving a run-around?
Should be: "It seems" or "it seemed like the family was owed"

Nightmare On Iberia: The Kids In Spain Are Forced Off The Plane
^My vote.

IMHO, I'd open with the gist of the story, before the United bit. Something like:

"On the Dans Deals forums, a mother shared a harrowing story of Iberia bumping her three children off their connecting flight from Madrid to Tel Aviv, leaving them alone and unattended to in a foreign country."


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Re: Has This Ever Happened To You With IBeria Airlines-Minors Bumped?
« Reply #284 on: September 06, 2017, 12:10:03 AM »
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Shocking Nightmare On Iberia: The Kids In Spain Are Forced Off The Plane

The Kids In Spain Are Forced Off The Plane: A Nightmare With Iberia

The Kids In Spain Are Forced Off The Plane: A Nightmare On Iberia

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Re: Has This Ever Happened To You With IBeria Airlines-Minors Bumped?
« Reply #285 on: September 06, 2017, 12:10:56 AM »
While it raises all the issues I felt that it didn't bring enough outrage to the fact that they simply bumped the kids I'm a foreign City for hours.

perhaps add the hotel pic.

Lastly I think that a tweet along with pic and headline will be tool to become viral
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It seems to speak more about the technicals of the $400 difference in comp due, instead of focusing on the emotional heartache of 3 little kids stranded across the world due to airline heartlessness and callousness. I would stick in picture of dingy hotel room, even though everyone knows it's just the lighting after focusing for 10 seconds. As pointed out before, a clickbait title, bullet point summary at end, and pic help prompt people to hit share button.
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Re: Has This Ever Happened To You With IBeria Airlines-Minors Bumped?
« Reply #286 on: September 06, 2017, 12:14:00 AM »
IMHO, I'd open with the gist of the story, before the United bit. Something like:

"On the Dans Deals forums, a mother shared a harrowing story of Iberia bumping her three children off their connecting flight from Madrid to Tel Aviv, leaving them alone and unattended to in a foreign country."
I agree with this, you can put in the Dr. Dao part at the end.
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Re: Has This Ever Happened To You With IBeria Airlines-Minors Bumped?
« Reply #287 on: September 06, 2017, 12:14:56 AM »
Should def add airlines, most people don't know what Iberia is...

Also I don't know if "The" fits so well. And it might sound better if you can say they were without parents or an adult.
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Re: Has This Ever Happened To You With IBeria Airlines-Minors Bumped?
« Reply #290 on: September 06, 2017, 12:18:53 AM »
Posted version 3.

Still not sure about the title though.

https://www.dansdeals.com/points-travel/airlines/airline-news/iberia-forces-3-kids-flying-alone-miami-tel-aviv-off-plane-spain/
Like the beginning of the article much better now. The the part of the title does not sound right.
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Re: Has This Ever Happened To You With IBeria Airlines-Minors Bumped?
« Reply #291 on: September 06, 2017, 12:19:51 AM »
Do the people not liking the "The" know what expression is being parodied?

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Re: Has This Ever Happened To You With IBeria Airlines-Minors Bumped?
« Reply #292 on: September 06, 2017, 12:22:00 AM »
Folks, if you don't like the title then post one you do like.
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Re: Has This Ever Happened To You With IBeria Airlines-Minors Bumped?
« Reply #293 on: September 06, 2017, 12:23:27 AM »
Do the people not liking the "The" know what expression is being parodied?

Exactly. It needs to remain, otherwise the entire point is lost.
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Re: Has This Ever Happened To You With IBeria Airlines-Minors Bumped?
« Reply #294 on: September 06, 2017, 12:24:07 AM »
This is getting excellent.  I think one point we can drive harderis that they refused to communicate with mother.


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Re: Has This Ever Happened To You With IBeria Airlines-Minors Bumped?
« Reply #295 on: September 06, 2017, 12:24:09 AM »
What's wrong with keeping it simple?

Iberia Airlines forces 3 kids off the plane in Madrid: A Nightmare With Iberia

Or something similar.
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Re: Has This Ever Happened To You With IBeria Airlines-Minors Bumped?
« Reply #296 on: September 06, 2017, 12:24:34 AM »
Updated: https://www.dansdeals.com/points-travel/airlines/airline-news/iberia-forces-3-kids-flying-alone-miami-tel-aviv-off-plane-spain/
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I would leave out the "her bed remains empty". It's obvious that she's out of bed to take pic...


I would also slant it a bit more that be aware that if you fly Iberia, your defenseless kids may never make it home.


This is a pure emotional pull ploy to get it to go viral.

Idk if I would link DDF thread... Or at least edit thread.
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Re: Has This Ever Happened To You With IBeria Airlines-Minors Bumped?
« Reply #297 on: September 06, 2017, 12:24:52 AM »
I think the post is very good now, the opening is much better.
You still didn't fix the tenses in "It seemed like the family is owed"
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Re: Has This Ever Happened To You With IBeria Airlines-Minors Bumped?
« Reply #298 on: September 06, 2017, 12:26:18 AM »
Folks, if you don't like the title then post one you do like.

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Re: Has This Ever Happened To You With IBeria Airlines-Minors Bumped?
« Reply #299 on: September 06, 2017, 12:26:59 AM »
What's wrong with keeping it simple?

Iberia Airlines forces 3 kids off the plane in Madrid: A Nightmare With Iberia

Or something similar.

No,  current title is very catchy